Welcome to the PoCoChapMo ‘24 Feedback Corner!
This thread is dedicated to gaining constructive feedback and workshopping your poems. Whether you're looking for a fresh perspective, suggestions for improvement, or simply want to share your work, this is the place for you.
How to Use the Feedback Corner
Sharing Your Work:
Post Your Poem: Share the poem you’d like feedback on. Be sure to include any specific areas where you’re seeking advice (e.g., structure, imagery, tone).
Context: If helpful, provide a brief context or background for your poem. This can include the prompt you used or your inspiration.
Be Respectful: Remember that sharing poetry can be a vulnerable experience. Offer support and encouragement alongside your critique.
Giving Feedback:
Be Constructive: Focus on providing helpful and specific feedback. Highlight what works well in the poem and suggest areas for improvement.
Be Respectful: Always approach feedback with kindness and respect. Remember, the goal is to help each other grow as poets.
Be Specific: Offer detailed observations and suggestions. For example, instead of saying “I didn’t like this part,” try “I think the imagery here could be stronger by adding more sensory details.”
Workshop Guidelines
Workshopping Poems:
Detailed Reviews: If you’d like a more in-depth critique, mention this when you post your poem. Fellow poets can then take the time to provide a thorough review.
Revisions: Feel free to post revised versions of your poems based on the feedback you receive. This can help track your progress and show how your work evolves.
Ask Questions: Don’t hesitate to ask specific questions about your poem or the feedback you receive. Clarifying questions can lead to more insightful critiques.
Example Post
Poem: Whispers of the Night
In the stillness, shadows dance,
Whispers weave a silent trance.
Moonlight casts a silver hue,
Dreams awaken, pure and true.
Context: This poem was inspired by a word prompt about “night.” I’m particularly looking for feedback on the imagery and flow.
Feedback Given:
Positive: “I love the imagery in the first line; it sets a mysterious tone.”
Constructive: “The second line feels a bit vague. Maybe adding a more specific detail about the shadows could enhance the image.”
Engage and Support
This Feedback Corner is not just about receiving feedback but also about giving it. Take the time to read and respond to others’ poems. Your insights can be incredibly valuable and help foster a sense of community.
We’re here to grow together as poets. Let’s make the most of this space by supporting each other with thoughtful and constructive feedback. Happy writing and sharing!
Day 16 Sestina
Background: I love anthropomorphic personifications and the change of season Ending it with a Haiku just for the heck of it :D
Seasons
1 gossamer announces Autumn
2 with dew dropped crystal bells
3 ribbons of transparent lace
4 wafting over fresh ploughed fields
5 red rosehips reawaken
6 vestiges of summer past
6 snuffling hedgehogs walking past
5 red-capped mushrooms reawaken
4 golden leaves dance over fields
3 some are stuck in spiders’ lace
2 beech-nuts spiky furry bells
1 and everywhere it smells of autumn
1 Oak moon introduces winter
2 Hooded crows like feathered monks
3 Shiver in the wet cold storm
4 Scaly tree bark shimmers silver
5 Sleeping dragons ancient creatures
6 Sleet pelts winter coats
6 Wolf moon conjures magic coats
5 Midwinter hunt o’ fabled creatures
4 Only iron be your ward never use the silver
3 Run! Run through the brazen storm!
2 Hoods won’t protect the trembling monks!
1 Blood moon calls the king of winter
1 Gentle footprints leave lucent flowers
2 Snowdrops crocus follow on
3 Spring jumps across a gurgling burn
4 She dances in the warming sun
5 Rainbows burst from breaking clouds
6 Sap rushes into swelling trunks
6 Fox cubs ring around the trunks
5 The oak protects them from the clouds
4 Yet suddenly there breaks the sun
3 A fawn drinks from the gurgling burn
2 And tiny paws are hanging on
1 Lest furry red kits land in flowers
1 Suddenly burst forth the heat
2 Summer strides with confidence
3 Colour explosion