Welcome to the PoCoChapMo ‘24 Feedback Corner!
This thread is dedicated to gaining constructive feedback and workshopping your poems. Whether you're looking for a fresh perspective, suggestions for improvement, or simply want to share your work, this is the place for you.
How to Use the Feedback Corner
Sharing Your Work:
Post Your Poem: Share the poem you’d like feedback on. Be sure to include any specific areas where you’re seeking advice (e.g., structure, imagery, tone).
Context: If helpful, provide a brief context or background for your poem. This can include the prompt you used or your inspiration.
Be Respectful: Remember that sharing poetry can be a vulnerable experience. Offer support and encouragement alongside your critique.
Giving Feedback:
Be Constructive: Focus on providing helpful and specific feedback. Highlight what works well in the poem and suggest areas for improvement.
Be Respectful: Always approach feedback with kindness and respect. Remember, the goal is to help each other grow as poets.
Be Specific: Offer detailed observations and suggestions. For example, instead of saying “I didn’t like this part,” try “I think the imagery here could be stronger by adding more sensory details.”
Workshop Guidelines
Workshopping Poems:
Detailed Reviews: If you’d like a more in-depth critique, mention this when you post your poem. Fellow poets can then take the time to provide a thorough review.
Revisions: Feel free to post revised versions of your poems based on the feedback you receive. This can help track your progress and show how your work evolves.
Ask Questions: Don’t hesitate to ask specific questions about your poem or the feedback you receive. Clarifying questions can lead to more insightful critiques.
Example Post
Poem: Whispers of the Night
In the stillness, shadows dance,
Whispers weave a silent trance.
Moonlight casts a silver hue,
Dreams awaken, pure and true.
Context: This poem was inspired by a word prompt about “night.” I’m particularly looking for feedback on the imagery and flow.
Feedback Given:
Positive: “I love the imagery in the first line; it sets a mysterious tone.”
Constructive: “The second line feels a bit vague. Maybe adding a more specific detail about the shadows could enhance the image.”
Engage and Support
This Feedback Corner is not just about receiving feedback but also about giving it. Take the time to read and respond to others’ poems. Your insights can be incredibly valuable and help foster a sense of community.
We’re here to grow together as poets. Let’s make the most of this space by supporting each other with thoughtful and constructive feedback. Happy writing and sharing!
Slowly catching up still have a lot of reading and feed-backing to do. I figured a villanelle would work well for reflection there are a couple more I work on but they need more time so here is a quick one. Day 9 Prompt Reflection
Context the move into September is the move into autumn for me autumn always symbolises letting go of what doesn't serve us anymore but yet celebrate that annual good bye with a mad dash of colours and flair
Not sure "sodden" works here but I couldn't think of a better one any suggestions welcome!
Join your Reflection
1 slowly the leaf sinks through the air
2 into a puddle’s cold embrace
3 and gently floats in sodden care
4 her sisters all still proud and fair
5 until a silky breeze gives chase
1 and slowly leaves sink through the air
7 kaleidoscopes of colour flare
8 through autumn air with grace
3 and gently land in sodden care
10 and meet their mirror image there
11 in jubilant embrace
1 and faster leaves dance through the air
13 to meet their echoes emotions bare
14 jump into ripples which erase
3 then gently float in sodden care
16 oh how I dread the trees so bare
17 echoes of past I must retrace
1 and slowly sink through autumn air
3 until I gently float in care